UnNatural - A supernatural horror game - editing complete, beta testing over

Game froze when I met the squad, also after you take the self defense class two of the options are incorrect; the first one says “I won’t give him time to react, I’ll hit him as hard as I can.” the second option says “I’ll let him get ready, then take him down” I was playing as a female so Alice is the bully, the pronouns would need to be changed to her. Digging the update though :slight_smile:

Thanks I’ll have a look today.

Hah! I can’t believe you actually used my character. Though I think I failed a bit in the physical description. I actually meant to imply that she had sort of a stereotypical American media hot girl build, but it’s my fault for trying to be clever instead of clear with my wording. I always have trouble describing PnP game characters too.

Anyway, I look forward to seeing how this pans out, and especially how this character works out as part of a semi militaristic government organization. :stuck_out_tongue:

@Shoelip

Yeah I intend to use all characters suggested :slight_smile: I thought you may have meant that but I was unsure so I went with that description. I will alter it when I continue writing.

@everyone

I’ve no idea what is causing the game to freeze when you meet the team in Unit Alpha, it says something about an invalid arguement? Unit Beta seems to work though so I’ll keep looking!

Well, don’t feel pressured to alter it if you don’t want to. I mean, I don’t think we should really have much say in what happens to the characters we offer up to you. After all, this is your project. I assumed that any ideas I offered to you for it became yours if you decided to use them. Of course if you do change it I’ll have no objections whatsoever.

You’re obviously a pretty decent writer, and I can see you improving already from the beginning of the project to now. The fact that you went to extra step to write the description of the characters in your own words to make them flow better with the rest of the text is just one small proof of that.

@Shoelip

thanks for the kind comments. I will change it as I want peoples characters to be as close to their initial idea and then I’ll evolve them as the story progresses

Minor update:

I believe I’ve fixed the freezing issue (had to remove a choice that required a stat check as that was what was causing the problem)

Still not the complete update but want to make sure the game works for everyone now before I go further into the game.

Enjoy!

link: http://nocturnalstillnesscog.webs.com/Unnatural/my%20game/index.html

So i can join Alpha now and keep playing? :smiley:

You can join alpha and go to the armoury the next update will be your first mission.

Just want to make sure I’ve fixed the freezing issue.

Freezing issue is fixed!

What could be difficult for you is making the Beta team plotline interesting, research doesn’t exactly lend itself well to action. Although the Beta plotline could make for some good political drama.

My nitpicky complaints are that the morality system seems incidental at this point and that Ashara seems too anime-esque for the game’s tone.

Runs smooth as silk now. And I can actually read the whole thing. Before it wouldn’t let me scroll down when it froze. Much better. Can’t wait to see more.

@13ventrm

You are right about Beta Unit on paper research does seem a bit boring however there will be action too as the player has to test any new method of killing/capturing discovered by the team.

As for morality do you mean not many choices or its not been used enough?

In regards to Ashara being too anime do you mean her looks or how I portrayed her?

@Shoelip

I’ll be refining Ashley Baker which will have a slightly different description depending on the gender of the PC (I’m considering using this as a way of defining a female PC’s bodyshape ie “being jealous of Ashley’s figure or not”

@everyone

which unit are you ending up with? Curious which unit is getting the most recruits :slight_smile:

7x Alpha
2x Beta

Trying to figure out what makes you go where.

@Txu

I’ll pm you the answer if you want.

@Shoelip

btw just realised the mistake in your character description was my mistake it made perfect sense but i misread it lol will be fixed in the full update :slight_smile:

Well not really. My mistake was not being clear so it’s perfectly reasonable that you’d interpret it differently than I intended.

@Nocturnal_Stillness

nah i like finding things out bymyself. :stuck_out_tongue: im in the train about 3 hours a day. I play CoG games to pass the time gives me enough time to figure out what choices create what paths (if that makes any sense. Sounds better in my head)

@Shoelip

it was explained very well I just misread the former/latter bit but no worries :slight_smile:

I like how the game is progressing. and if it’s not too late I’d like to make a character suggestion. X_X

Character suggestions are still welcome

Anime-esque in her appearance, it’s like you dropped someone from any given Final Fantasy game into your urban horror fantasy game. My problem with the morality system in its current incarnation is that a) other than my book question, there are no choices to effect it. B) That it so far effects absolutely nothing.

I found it pretty easy to manipulate my stats to get into the unit I want, so I got beta when I wanted beta and alpha when I wanted alpha.

For another character suggestion, perhaps a naive medic who’s apalled at how the S.R.T. treats the sentient supernatural beings who’ve committed crimes, capturing them and using them for invasive research rather than attempting to reform them. Just tossing an idea around.